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sad and depressed
and depressed sighs
depressed sighs all
sighs all day
*sigh*
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daeira Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2004
How about describing your emotion, instead of plainly stating that you are sad? Intrigue and catch the readers attention! Grasp it firmly and hold onto it! But plainly telling me "I feel sad" isn't all that effective. Everyone can say that - poets take a step beyond.
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OneST8 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2004   Writer
The point of this one was that sad isn't really what I want and that I don't want to hold on to it at all so why would I want my readers to dwell on my sadness?

If you wanted more read my other poem called Sadness.

All in all... I didn't think long enough about submitting this one and I know I shouldn't have *shrugs* but I did.

It's certainly one of the worst in my gallery, no mistaking that.
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